Guys, I'm not coming here with shit. I've been doing it for seven years now and I think this material is golden. BUT I'm here because I am very unhappy with my results. I've gotten some feedback privately on this forum and I want to share what I've come up with. It's not a copypasta but more of a template. I think you will notice that each sentence has a purpose based on PUA fundamentals. Problem (and this is debatable, tell me what you think) is that it comes across as trying too hard and bragging. Also please forgive me for being very proud of my work. I really, really welcome harsh criticism!


Headline is i would be a bad bf
Original profile: 40 views on POF in 7 hours, 6 conversations, 2 numbers, but even though I'm tall and cute I'm not connecting with girls 8.5+
I live life on the edge. I've been a pilot, stockbroker, trader, oil drilling rig, explosives, yada yada. I take big risks when it's the right thing to do, and I'm good at it because I work very hard. I'm in Central LA now.
I only want to talk to women who can handle a testosterone-fueled 190 freight train and.... with whom I can slow down a bit. I'm flattered but if you're a stripper, bartender, shot girl, etc., in my experience, it's probably not going to work out. It takes a lot to seduce me so I'm not expecting much on here. Strike while the iron is hot and do not write to me if you're timid. I am too busy.
Write to me if you are brave.

First Date
Whoa slow down girl. Maybe. If we're not careful you'll fall madly in love with me... and then what?
First, there are some things i look for in a woman. Are you spontaneous? Adventurous? A good kisser?

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headline is no hookers plz (gross!)
What I just wrote in the last hour (for the tldr crowd, it's more of a story, visualization, humor, and personal connection): the humor isn't the best, looking for ideas

So far I have lived life on the edge, but what's important is that I'm the most amazing guy you'll ever meet and perfect husband material — according to my grandma, since I can totally carry 10 shopping bags on each hand.

This is one of the awesome bedtime story I'll tell the kids: thousands of miles inland, I was on an oil rig when it started spewing salt water and crude oil into the air, slowly at first, and the more it flowed, the faster it went, until in ten seconds there was a geyser 30 feet into the air! I was right under it getting drenched with two other roughnecks high over the ground! We wrestled and pulled and pushed and yelled and finally got it shut and saved the day.

And when the kids watch Ice Road Truckers reruns, I will tell them how one winter I talked to some truckers delivering material to the rig, and I quit drilling to drive trucks because they worked the ice roads and swore the driving here was a lot tougher than on the ice roads in stupid Canada. But Canada is not just stupid. It is also stupid cold.

So I'm sitting here eating HaagenDazs, watching Oprah, and wondering how to screen out time-wasters. I started from nothing and did some very cool things, but the only thing that matters is what kind of person I've become. Youth, money, feeling invincible, stupid thrills, the highest highs and the lowest lows — they all have taught me humility and to never underestimate the people I meet.

My favorite thing is to work very hard all day, then pick up a steak, wine, and some massage oil at Whole Foods, cook with a nice girl, beat her at chess so i get the massage, inevitably have to show her how to do it better, and what happens for the next two hours is none of your business!

It does sound like you are bragging. It also sounds like you are trying to challenge them, and I think challenges are great...but you should be a little more subtle with it. And I think it's a big mistake to disqualify anyone when you're making your introduction. You want to appear welcoming.

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New profile gets 16 views, 4 conversations and 3 numbers in one day. Solid 8s by looks&career. But that's still 12 babes i messaged that i should have had respond! Let's work on this.

My honest opinion, and I'm no woman, is that this guy is an arrogant fuck. Typically, women aren't interested in that. They want to decide that you're a high value guy on their own, they don't need you to tell them, and don't want you to.

I would suggest shitcanning all of the self appreciating shit and focusing on what you want in a woman. Make it sound like the type of woman most of them want to be, and sound confident in expressing what you like or look for and it's all good.