hi guys,

am going sarging this Saturdayand am busy preparing my routine.

I am now onto midgame. so i want to practise midgame this weekend. I am not especially looking for f closes or k closes or anything else. i will consider my sarging successful if i simply do my routine and then eject safely. when i get good with mid game then i am going to isolate and close. (hopefully soon)

so,

i do my airport opener.which I explained in the thread "bilingual" in the midgame section or approaching/opening section.
then, I immediately do a false time constraint.
listen I have to go in a minute but..
do you work around here? she says, yes or no.
I say, great. I do translating in the police station in the airport but normally i work in a school down south teaching English.(half of this is bullshit the other half true. guess which
her- oh, yeah?
Yeah, kids drive me crazy day in day out but you know, kids do some funny stuff too, and they also teach you some really important things, like this.
i say, "give me your hand- you gotta catch my thumb."
she wins- i say, hey you won hi 5.
she loses. i say, hey you suck! kids in my first grade could beat you.
but hey dont worry about it-(i give a quick hug)
wow, my friends have left without me. I have to go. you seem like fun, call you sometime?

listen guys, i would really appreciate some feedback, tell me it sucks but tell me why it sucks and more importantly any corrections to the script you think would make it more interesting and DHV.

I really appreciate any comments,
happy gaming!!!

Looks pretty solid you have some great kino in there defo gonna try that one but

"wow, my friends have left without me. I have to go. you seem like fun, call you sometime?"

is a DLV in my opinion.

Friends dont leave alphas behind saying that is like saying, "Hey im such a loser that my friends forgot that im with them, im gonna go now since i have no friends PLEASE CALL ME"

also instead of saying that try saying

Wow, its past my bedtime (with a smile on your face) i'm gonna head out , you seem like alot of fun, you know what give me your number and if your a good girl (again with a slight smile on your face) when im around ill give you a call.

Something along those lines without sounding needy while putting some C&F on the #close.