I just came up with this story critique it pls

What would you choose the greatest sex of your life and i mean nothing would even come close or true love?


I'm asking because yesterday i had quite a day. First i get a phone call from some number i never saw before and turns out my ex Jessica the only girl i can say i ever loved..is back in the country, not only that she said she just bought a condo 5 minutes away from where i live anywayi haven't heard from her in a year and she tells me how she wants to see me how she misses me and etc..so we made plans for a coffee later on in the week..

then later on in the night It was my friend's bachelor's party so i was forced to go to a strip joint..i'm not a fan of those but he's a good friend so i went...once there i'm having a stella...my fav beer if you ever wanna buy me one...and my friend says to me "check that girl out she's sooo hot" i turn around and i couldn't believe my eyes...sorri (check phone for a txt msg to build suspense lol) and ya where was i ya turns out it was my highschool sweetheart...i can't belive it she barelly changed ..well except for the breast implants lol so she comes running up to me gives me a hug and we catch up bla bla bla...anyway she wants to go for drinks this weekend...and with this girl i had the best sex ever..nothing even came close....anyway i just plan on catching up with both nothing more but still if you go for one or the other which owuld u go for? great great sex or love?

i just made this up on the spot...what should i add ? cut ? change?? thanks for input

Seems like you are trying to hard to "brag" in this. I know you are just trying to DHV pre-selection. Of course you are also somewhat disqualifying yourself from them this way. Also, the story is pretty long too. In a night time venue you wouldn't likely be able to finish this.

If you decided to keep it. What are you going to say when they say great sex? or great love? What are you going to transition to when this quick conversation ends?

Also, and indirect opener implies that you are not actively hitting on them. You start to ground the opener by saying "I ask because...yesterday I had quit a day." Well that doesn't really explain why you're asking them what to do. Which basically means that they know you came across the room to chat them up and hit on them.

You saying, "I'm asking because my friends over there and I were talking about it. We can't see to agree on an answer and I need you to help me settle this...." would be better.

Can you see where I'm coming from?!?

The honest truth is it doesn't matter what I say or anyone else says on this forum. If it gets you measurable results in field then that's all that matters.

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Good pointers thanks..Ya your way of opening would be better for sure and you're right if i choose to use i gotta think of where to transition to from there...thanks