So i was working today and this really beautiful girl came in restaurant, she was an HB8. Me and her eyed each other for awhile. So at last i had the guts to go over there and talked to her. I know did a lot wrong but i ended up number closing her. It ended up feeling really wierd so here a script of what i can remember:

Me: Hey do i know you?? I swear i remember i know you from somewhere. (i said "i swear" quite a few times, I was really nervous).
Her: I dont know, do you?
Me: I dont know so where are you from?
Her: Hollywood, California (made up. lol)
Me: So whats your name?
Her: Kaci, whats yours?
Me: Im Jon. Nice to me you Kaci.
Her: Nice to meet you too.
Me: Well i have to get back to work, if you need anything let me know.
Her: Okay!
(She laughed and smiled a lot)

2nd Interaction
(she was walking past me)
Me: You are not following me are you???
Her: hahaha Nooo!

3rd Interaction
She was getting ready to leave and my first number attempt was a rejection, she felt uncomfortable i think.
Me: He well i gotta go soon, but you should give me your number.
Her: Ummm idk.
Me: i swear you were following me (i shouldnt said that)
Her: Haha you wish!

4th interaction
Me: so i see how its gonna be.
Her: What?
Me: You know what.. lol.
Her: then she gave the digits right away.
Me: im not a creepo dont worry.

So that was my number close, can you tell me what i did wrong and how i can improve. And when should i call her and what should i say. That was like my first number close in awhile.
Thanks.

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I've been through it all,
the fails, the falls.
I'm like niagra
but I got right back up like Viagra.
-Tha Carter III

well u did the hard thing that was going up to her but u need to no what u r going to say to her like something that she likes and u like. what i like to talk about is party storys because that makes her laugh and makes u look cool and a person she would like to hang out with and if u need to make one up she will never no. but i give u ups for going up to this girl 4 times i would have tryed once and walked away. But when u start going up to girls like 3 to 4 times they start to get scared like u are going to follow them home. what u need to do is get them interested in u so when u talk to her on the phone she is like this the kool guy that i meet at the coffee shop

U have to capture her interest more.
Leave her with a statement that will make her think your mysterious or intriguing. That way she will want to know more about you.

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--Brad