hey stealth...
you seem like you are motivated and have the right mindset [and you're a member of PMZ... which unfortunately i can't be]
BUT
some of these opener's aren't "GREAT" as your thread is titled...
it's nice to be confident and i think that the people on this site can appreciated confidence because its part of being an alpha...
part of confidence is being comfortable asking for critique... so next time you post something like this, i think we'd all appreciate that you make sure it is either top notch... or if you've come up with things on your own, ask for some critique... thats what everyone's here for
... and yea... i agree with the assessment that LOCO gave...
also
Quote:
"Did you see that guy that blew that stopped sign and crashed into a old ladies car? He's such as asshole that he got out and started yelling at the poor old woman!"
I realize that this is probably a take on the "did you see that fight outside" opener... but i really cant see this working with the wording that you gave it... mainly because i'm sure that most people would notice a car crash
also... the problem is that by calling him an asshole, you give the girl a negative feeling about the story in general [negativity is really never good]
in the catfight opener, she'd probably be laughing about the fact that some girls were fighting about nothing.... in this case she would be sad/upset that the guy is an ass