I think cyclone may have meant the worst pickup line online are "hi" and "hey sexy babe"
anyway...
Quote:
"(College name) 2014. From (insert city). Coffee addict, guitarist and champion thumb wrestler. Life isn't meant to be taken too seriously. Join me for a beer."
bad, but not horrible.
You aren't showing any value, prizability, or selectiveness. No one cares you are a coffee addict, and thumb wrestling is PUA circa 2006; might as well run the Cube with that outdated shit. Why are you asking to have her join you for a beer? You don't even know who they are yet. Does that sound like you are being selective and have high value? You did manage to sound upbeat and somewhat humorous, so that is something.
Here is my suggestion, just Google "good Tinder Profile content" and copy and paste some decent shit. Don't reinvent the wheel, your too new at this to come up with good shit on your own. And while it's true girls mainly look at pix, and then maybe content, the profile content is much more important for woman than for men.
I'm not bad looking but I promise you my text game and profile content have gotten me more puss then my pix. The pictures just open the door.