Comments greatly appreciated.

I got this girl's number next to my gym, she's a store clerk or something. I hear from alot of people not to text too much before the first date.. but it's been a week or so since I've seen her, thought I'd send a message.

*Note this is done with absolutely no pick-up text game knowledge.*

Me: I was spotting this guy at the gym and he started crying after his set. SOMEONE is on steroids!
Her: Are you sure it wasn't you?!
Me: Pssh, I'm a real man, I only cry after sex, or when there's a beautiful blue sky like there is now.. Oh god, I'm tearing up.
Her: hahaha, how gay!! ))
Me: Shut up Mario, that's a stupid name. *Her real name is Myrah, I call her Mario.*
Her: (
Me: It's okay, I'm willing to work past this
Her: Yeah cause you're gay, like I mentioned before... right? hahaha.. )
Me: Haha, you're so dead to me.
Her: LOL is that so?
Me: haha, yeah. Just when I thought things would work out between us We could go on cruises, travel to Rome! Goto the Zoo next thursday... but I guess not. Too bad, I'm sure I'll live.
Her: Hahaha!!! I guess.. R.I.P Mario.


Thanks alot for reading this far.. Any comments?

Also what would be something witty along the lines of..

Yeah, I hear the __________ exhibit is off the chain!

I was thinking I hear the Cow exhibit is absolutely life changing. It has three tattoos, one that looks like Jesus. Local legend says that it's a reincarnation of

Not sure.

Well bro, congratulations. You are awesome.
But seriously, you are fun, and playful, but you should have negged her in some way.
And thumbs up for not failing the BS test, when she called you a gay you haven't gone all offensive, like:"I am not gay, I love women and blablabla", but you shouldn't respond to a neg at all. If she negs you, ignore it.

But, overall, you were seriously awesome... Keep up the good work bro...

damn man, thanks so much for the input! Like most of us, maybe aside from the well accomplished, we're all a bit insecure. And hearing this helps a ton.

Thanks alot of your input, and I agree wholly that I should have negged!

If there is anyone else that would like to add to this, I would be happy to hear from you