Im not so good story teller i can tell a story but not longer then 20 seconds i cannot file up the story with many details to make it exciting so ppl are generaly interesting in listeing i im a good listener but i really suck at telling a story = (
i know exatly how imporment it is to get be a good a story teller to get a girl so im looking to become good at it is there any advice u guys can give me to become a good story teller maybe i should learn some new words and stuff like that so i become more eloquently anyone here have the same problem like me and suck at story telling ? please help me

I used to be terrible. I'm now passable, so not an expert.

1) Read along with this. It will take you 3 or 4 minutes. Match the timing. Match the emphasis.
http://www.kindersite.org/Content/Mr.%20Happy.swf

1a) Varied voice tone

1c) Pauses. While they feel way too long, they're not!

1d) Varied speed of talking

2) Use eye contact to emphasise points. Traditionally, the person talking has minimal eye contact while the person listening has most of the eye contact. This is to allow the talker to concentrate more clearly.

3) If you can, multi-thread quick one liners in long stories. To see how this is done, watch a comedy gig. Most of the guys who do observational stuff are very good at this. The best I've seen is Russell Howard.

4) Have a definite ending. You'll notice the people who are good have a way of ending a story that ensures that people know the story is over and that people should laugh.

Easy. Go natural. Dump all this rubbish.

Using routines and openers etc I've had 0 lays. Using natural game it is quite the opposite.

This might seem unhelpful, but it could be very helpful to you. But each to their own.

Okay a bit off topic but a girl asked me to tell her a fairytale over text so she can go to sleep . It was very unexpected and i really didnt know what to say so i pretended to be a sleep. Should i have made something up or is that a good way to get friendzoned. By the way i have to specify that she is 17 and i am not like pedo.

Too late now and I doubt it'll ever happen again, but it's a great chance. Two lead characters are you and her, fill it to the brim with smut/innuendo. Let her go to sleep thinking about that combination. Sorted.

Well if it happens ever again I guess I'll be ready. The way you say it does sound like a great opportunity.

Please tell me that your name is Jack!

"So she got Jack's beans in her hand and rubbed them and a massive stalk began to grow..."

"She climbed on top of Jack's beanstalk..."

Hahahaha thats so funny. I wish my name is not Jack. Its unfortunate that only girls can get away with stuff like that. I doubt any guy could pull of asking a girl for a goodnight story

It doesn't matter what you are saying to girls for them to like you. It's all about your body language, the charisma you radiate and the comfort you reflect from yourself.

I suggest you should learn some really good story from a pua video then go out and practice the same story every time. Open 100 sets and say the story and then do the same with a really lame story. By the end of these 200 sets you'll notice that they don't react on what the story is saying but how you are delivering it.

def agree with what zebra g has said.

AND

this is super easy-something i realized that i now use all the time.
-Audience participation-

you can make anyone 20X more involved in a conversation just by using what i call "checkpoints" such as:

-have you ever had that happen to you?
-i can tell, you definitely know what i'm talking about, right
-because, don't you hate/love it when

put a break in the story and throw one of these in. notice you you you being used in each one. think about it this way: when you're telling a story, you're holding an umbrella over yourself-while the HB is soaking wet next to you. Now despite her tits showing through her wet tshirt, you want to draw her into the conversation too-aka, bring her in under that umbrella. By using these checkpoints, you're expanding the rhelm of the convo beyond just yourself and including her too.

This doesn't only have to be with girls-literally any human being. And if you're really adventurous, animals too i suppose.

Cheers
Ali

[quote="alrasch"]Im not so good story teller i can tell a story but not longer then 20 seconds i cannot file up the story with many details to make it exciting so ppl are generaly interesting in listeing i im a good listener but i really suck at telling a story = (
i know exatly how imporment it is to get be a good a story teller to get a girl so im looking to become good at it is there any advice u guys can give me to become a good story teller maybe i should learn some new words and stuff like that so i become more eloquently anyone here have the same problem like me and suck at story telling ? please help me[/quote]

Replying to your post NOT in the context of "pick up".
I guess I know EXACTLY what you mean. I also believe storytelling as an ability is a very powerful tool in communication (and it is so in any setting, not only in pick-up). (so when I first found a book on "whoever tells the best story wins" I was like "yeah, this is exactly so"). I also know who is the best storyteller in the group (or in class, or anywhere), which attributes are necessary for the best performance, but it is, for fu*in christ, still hard for myself to be a good storyteller. I will tell you that I looked for the answer in different spheres of science, and I am inclined to conclude that this ability depends on several factors, whereas some may play greater role. Interestingly, I noticed (A LOT), that people from countryside were MUCH better storytellers, and were so MUCH frequently. I noticed this in my relatives, in my friends, and in many people that I have met (although there were quite exceptional people). Especially if it is related to humor, country people can tell very naturally (opposed to people who are 'artificial' in storytelling). Anyways, one of the factors that I reason that we are 'bad' storytellers is because of our brain's construction. Not that it is fundamentally different, but probably because there may be neurophysiological peculiarities (but even assuming this is hard for me, cos i'm not an expert in brain anatomy). Also, I think there is another factor... some people enter a certain state of consciousness when telling a story. I was once with a friend, and we were telling different stories from our lives, and I while I was telling one of my stories, I noticed that I was almost day-dreaming the story I was telling, and it was smooth and perfect, and my friend was listening greedily. This is when I thought: people enter into a different conscious state (not in a literal sense, and not radically so, but are mildly absorbed by their own story), so for them it is much easier, and stories fly off their mouth very naturally. As for the solution, so far I could not devise myself a technique, but in the context of pick-up I could suggest you the following:
*use vibrant idioms ('winged words' they also say??)
*use emotion, and at times, enthusiasm when telling something interesting
I could list other advice, but I certainly don't have a perfect prescription, so what you would have to do is to research more on the subject, follow the abovementioned rules, practice more, and maybe someday you will achieve your goal, something which I also aspire in my life.