Ok, tried online sargin before. Gave up couple months ago, but im goin back for another try.
Havnt been havin great success with the Email form ive been usin
Its kinda David M's formula of...
1)Intro
2)Neg
3)About me
4)About her
5)Qualify
6)Call to action

Ive sent many of these in this form. I just copy paste and add in a personalized 'Neg' & the 'about her'. But basically they all have been pretty much this same kinda thing.
Heres just a randomly selected sample.
Obviously...She only had one pic, and had just moved to my state from cali and screenname was "Luxy" somthin or other & she wrote in her profile "Ima laid back blonde"... Just to give all the context...

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"Hey Miss Lux... Im Joshua.

Wheres all your pictures. I only get the 1 to see?
"Recently moved back from California"? lol Thats not like code for drug mule is it?

Ok, Laid back blonde, I saw your 1 pic!.. and had to look at your profile. I thought that you looked like a woman that had her life together. lol And Not a creepo stalker girl online!

So What, besides having a great smile and cute dog, is there that would make me, just have to know, a woman like you?
Message me back quick, we are both lookin for something, and it would be crazy to wait to find it...

-J"
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Lota smart guys that seem to be real good at this on here, figured id ask your opinion and not my idiot friends!

Thnx guys

-J

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"Women like the Roses
Men like the TwoLips"

I would say that message is a little bit long. And I hope the grammar is better in the actual message.

I'd lose the where's all your pictures line.
Change the joke slightly but on the same lines.
Get rid of the whole next paragraph.
Clean up the next line.
And get rid of the message quick line as that sounds needy and desperate.
So it'd look like this....

Hey, Miss Lux, I'm Joshua.

You've "recently moved back to California" lol time off for good behaviour then?!

Anyway, besides having a great smile and a cute dog, what would make me just HAVE to know a woman like you?

J


Even still that's a big qualifying question that in my experience isn't always answered after a first message.