Hey gnecco,
I agree with above, it is too long and just trying too hard. Also, only use the second photo. NEVER use a photo that has another woman (ie your ex) cropped out of it. It's a total turn off to women.
Also, listing things that you don't like ie "don't message me if" is not the way to go. Women are not attracted to that. It screams of a bitter man who has been burned by women in the past who said/did those things you are listing. Much better to say what you DO want - then you will attract it.
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PS - check your spelling & grammar - girls totally notice that!