Do you plan on breathing at all during this story? The first five lines are one long run-on sentance, I think I'd pass out after the third line. And dude, passing out won't get you any numbers...
Haha but really... Made up stories are pathetic in my mind. Now if you played it off as a joke at the end, I can see that as a good story. Something like, "So how much of that did you believe? And don't tell me the whole thing or I'm walking."
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I don't have an ego, I just love how awesome I am.
