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butterfield
PostPosted: Wed Mar 12, 2008 11:32 pm 
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This is my final facebook 'about me' section. What do u guys think?

I am a confident, ruthless and selfish person. I don’t like attention seekers and I do what I want, when I want. I am young enough to enjoy life but old enough to know how to enjoy it. I am going to be a business consultant.
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 13, 2008 12:22 am 
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add more cocky/ funny. it sounds a bit too serious and could us emroe material. my 2 cents
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 13, 2008 12:54 am 
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I dont really know how to do cocky funny yet, any suggestions?
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Honestly, 90% of people won't read it. But if you want it to say something worthwhile, add something... ABOUT YOU. It seems cliche, but works. Since I don't like explaining myself, mine says...
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im a ginger, life is good, get to know me by talking to me

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Leave it the way it is, if you want to lighten it up throw in a "haha", but its pretty damn cool the way you have it- authoritative, to the point, no bullshit

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PostPosted: Thu Mar 13, 2008 11:10 am 
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I'll be honest - it's a poor rip of Neil Strauss' "blurb".

Come up with something original that really is representative of you. If you don't yet know how to do cocky funny, then you shouldn't be able to pull off what you wrote properly without being an actual dick. And being a dick isn't what being a pickup artist is all about...

PM me if you want some more detailed help.
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I'll be honest - it's a poor rip of Neil Strauss' "blurb".

Come up with something original that really is representative of you. If you don't yet know how to do cocky funny, then you shouldn't be able to pull off what you wrote properly without being an actual dick. And being a dick isn't what being a pickup artist is all about...

PM me if you want some more detailed help.
lol yeah I was going to say that it's just a powdered down and more politically correct version of Style's shock profile.

The reason Style's original "blurb" worked was because it was so shocking and politically incorrect. Quit pussyfooting around this kinda shit. If you're gunna do something, do it. So, if you wanna make a shocking profile, make a shocking profile. Otherwise, do something else.

PM Wilde if you want some detailed help. =P
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