What do you think about this story to tell

WalterWoods

I came up with a story to tell a girl in a conversation. Well, not really a story but just something that I think might work to get some interest. Its not true of course. I tell the girl that I have a friend from back home, I'm far away from the state where I grew up right now, who I was really close with and that we grew up together and knew each other from when we were just barely able to talk, that part is true enough I guess. Then I explain that I was just talking with this friend and that he has just bought a puppy. And now this friend wants to name the dog after me becuase he says he misses me so much. Then I ask the girl about what my reaction should be.

I think this will give me some social proof and its also a really funny thing to talk about thats kind of interesting.

Any problems with this idea that you can spot? Any good parts?

Killians · Posted: Sun Apr 13, 2008 12:12 am Post subject:

yeeeeaaah...I wouldnt use that.

Its sounds a little corny and its not even true.

WalterWoods · Posted: Sun Apr 13, 2008 2:29 am Post subject:

This is going to sound defensive, but why is it corny? I would actually genuinely like to know before I end up using it. And I thought stories that gave you higher value whether they were true or not were just what you do. It would fit in with a kind of image I'm trying to make thats hard to explain but is generally meant to seem artistic and very unique/different that I think matches better with who I actually am.

mOlis_pir3s · Posted: Sun Apr 13, 2008 2:48 am Post subject:

1. if your friend was to buy a puppy do you really think he would do that?
2. if you were going to buy a puppy would you do that?
3. what is your name? Casey?
4. its not baaaAAad..i mean she could say he says he misses you so much? i think your friend is gay" lol
5. artistic? you're better off saying your friend is starting a band back home and he wants to call it "X" (X being something you used to call eachother when you were back home..)

i wouldnt go with it though :/ not awful..but not for me..

WalterWoods · Posted: Sun Apr 13, 2008 2:55 am Post subject:

1. no
2.no
3. no, its a guy i know, long story.
4.yeah i would say its weird of my friend and that i told him so
5.the story doesn't make me seem artistic but it is unusual

Yeah, maybe its not plausible enough. Thats a good point. I just thought that the fact that its so unusual would be part of its appeal.

wtfpwnage · Posted: Sun Apr 13, 2008 8:33 am Post subject:

it would work alot better if your friend was a girl

WalterWoods · Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2008 6:29 am Post subject:

What if it was my two friends who were roommates now. I just think it would sound too manipulative if I made the friend a girl.

Killians · Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2008 6:37 am Post subject:

Honestly, from a female standpoint I would probably laugh at how lame it sounded. I mean c'mon a guy naming his puppy after you...thats screaming gay.

cain25 · Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2008 7:35 am Post subject:

WalterWoods · Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2008 8:48 am Post subject:

Yeah ok fine. The story sucks. Damn you all! jk.

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