Ok guys I need some advice

I'm really good with actually talking to girls, and last night I went out and sarged with my wings for about six hours or so. I opened the first set of the night it went well and I could've made out with my target but I didn't pull the trigger. I thought at the time it would inappropriate to kiss her infront of everyone. So now I'm kinda pissed at myself because after a while I got a bit drunk so my game kind of suffered from that. I opened a few more sets at another bar. I got a number or two, but one set that bugged me inparticular was one involving a stripper. I tried to run new material on her that I've never used before so it's not in the can yet and I think it was two long. Thats what my buddies told me, because I initially had the girl. I ran this good story but it the setting I was in with loud music, and people bumping into us it was hard to keep her attention. My buddies told me next time to keep it short and sweet. I wanted to ask you guys if you had any examples of good short and sweet dhv stories I could use?

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