The pictures are great. Very diverse, a nice mix of smiling and seriousness, and it shows you're active. You're also a pretty attractive guy. You also have like 9 different hair styles, it seems. Not like that's relevant, of course.

Your "About Me" doesn't really tell much about you at all. Get rid of the list of things you don't like in a woman. It's too serious. Add some flare to your profile. Show how playful and verbally creative you are. Don't be afraid to expand on a topic over a few sentences. If a woman clicks your profile it's because your picture caught her eye and she'll be more than willing to read it from top to bottom to get to know more about you. Finally, you should intentionally leave room for girls to ask questions about you. Don't give out every last detail about each topic you discuss.

Your "First Date" thing is a bit too...something. It also has a grammatical error. Come up with something funny or light:

"For our first date, we'll go to Walmart. You won't have to get too dressed up, I can find out what your favorite color is, and you can see if I blush when we walk through the lingerie aisle."

Most importantly, make sure you aren't copying material from other profiles. It's very easy to detect whether you're saying something genuine or not.