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Author:  Dr. Mooney [ Thu Jan 12, 2012 6:48 am ]
Post subject:  Going to send this to the girl I like...
"Hey, what's up? If you're free tomorrow night, we should get some food or go out to dinner. I could get you around 7. If not, you'll be missing out on a fun night; but lemme know."

Any other ways you would word this?
I think its pretty straight forward and gets to the point.
Author:  Dr. Mooney [ Thu Jan 12, 2012 7:23 am ]
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I asked her days ago and she didnt say yes or no, so im giving it one more chance
Author:  charblad [ Thu Jan 12, 2012 7:26 am ]
Post subject:  Re: Going to send this to the girl I like...
Quote:
"Hey, what's up? If you're free tomorrow night, we should get some food or go out to dinner. I could get you around 7. If not, you'll be missing out on a fun night; but lemme know."

Any other ways you would word this?
I think its pretty straight forward and gets to the point.
Oh jeez...
1st Off way to long, your asking a girl out; not to proofread your story :)
2nd Don't ask her "hey whats up" - to many questions in one text, shes going to answer the first thing she sees (hey whats up) and ignore the date question.
3rd Be WAYY more confident, she'll read this as "hey if you want we could eat or something, i mean if your free around 7, but whenever you want ill make time"
4th Don't be so obvious with the qualifyer try something closer to "I'm going to (restaurant name) tomorrow at 7, if you arn't going to have fun don't come"
Author:  Dr. Mooney [ Thu Jan 12, 2012 7:35 am ]
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Perfect. Ill change it up. Thing is shes about an hour away, so idk how to make it sound as to where im already going and im inviting her. Im not going to drive an hour just to get food for myself.
Author:  Dr. Mooney [ Thu Jan 12, 2012 8:55 am ]
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Hey, tomorrow night, I'm going to "name of resturant" its going to be a good time: you should come along. I can get you.


Better?
Author:  Cointoss [ Thu Jan 12, 2012 2:48 pm ]
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Quote:
I'm taking you to "name of resturant" tomorrow night. When do I pick you up?
Fixed.
Author:  charblad [ Thu Jan 12, 2012 4:05 pm ]
Post subject: 
Quote:
Hey, tomorrow night, I'm going to "name of resturant" its going to be a good time: you should come along. I can get you.
Better?
You still need more confidence, look at what cointoss wrote; take any suggestions out of it, no "should, it would be nice to, if you want" thats weak stuff and women will flake on you.
Cointoss I wrote it like I did to match his style; it's personal when you take their sentence and edit it, rather than throw it out and make a new one; that way it's less 'fake'; but either cointoss' or my sentence is fine to choose
Author:  Dr. Mooney [ Thu Jan 12, 2012 9:10 pm ]
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So, I texted that to her a few hours ago, what coin toss said: and she never responded. Fuck her, I'm done with her. lol
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