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| Author: | ashcorbin [ Fri Oct 22, 2010 3:17 am ] |
| Post subject: | new DHV story |
Today I had one of those opportunities to create a new DHV story, just wondering what people think about it. While working on my truck today with my buddy, we discovered we didn't have all the tools needed so we jumped in his car and drove down to the auto parts store, as soon as we pulled into the street his phone rang and it was his dad saying that my buddys younger brother had been in a car wreck and we needed to go deal with the car and then pick him up at the hospital. so we ofcourse bailed on the project at hand I mean its his brother this is much more important than a power steering pump. we then drove out to the middle of no where and find the car wedged inbetween a tree and a stump slumped on its side so we pull all the stuff thats worth anything out of the car and go down to the passanger side and see beer bottles and a 1/5 of vodka so we quickly threw all the beer bottles and vodka down in the woods so nobody would see them when they tow the truck away and then we went and picked him up and royally bitched him out about how stupid could you be. Thoughts on how to improve the story? |
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| Author: | Junglepimp [ Thu Nov 04, 2010 7:01 pm ] |
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Man.. it's kinda on the boring side. You need to spice it from "we went to the site and found...". If you mention what's expected.. a car wreck, it's not gonna be that interesting. Turn it into something lighter and something that'll invite some questions from her side. A little on the humorous side.. if you get me 
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| Author: | ashcorbin [ Thu Nov 04, 2010 11:41 pm ] |
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yeah I totally get you... Ive actually used this twice since it happened and it was a total fail.. now I know how to try and rework it a bit, thanks man |
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