Ok, so I'm developing just my basic EV right now and I've 'designed' this routine/canned response for DHV'ing. Keep in mind this is all true stuff about myself. I welcome all critique.
HB: So what do you do?
Holden: Let me put it this way, when you were a kid what did you want to be when you grew up?
SET: Blah Blah Blah
Holden: Well when I was 6 and I was asked what did I want to be when I grew up, do you know what I said?
Holden: A Dog. (pause for laughs) No really! I thought it was a job I could pick. You know, doctor, lawyer, teacher, and dog. A perfectly good career. But hey I was 6 and didn't know any better. I'm sure you powerpuff girls (gets laughs) all wanted to be princesses when you grew up?
SET: *Depending on the response you can NEG your target that she'd be the Grumpy witch if her bitchshield is still up*
Holden: But what I do have is a piece of construction paper I saved since I was 8 where the teacher made us draw what we wanted to be. And I always wanted to be a policeman. So I guess I changed from wanting to be a dog one year into becoming a Pig the next (pause for laughs). But then when I got to High School I met that 'one' teacher that really taught you. I think everyone has that 'cool' teacher that they will always remember. Don't you think, who was yours (to set)?
SET: Blah Blah Blah
*If someones response takes too long do Mystery's 'ANNNNNNNND Back to me'*
Holden: So mine was Mr. MacAulay, he was my Grade 10 Science teacher and later on Biology and Chemistry teacher in Grade 11 and 12. He was the teacher I would talk to after class and he'd help me understand science a lot better. So by the time I finished High School I was all ramped up and wanted to become a Scientist. There was only one problem, I didn't really know what a Scientist did. I had some idea that you hanged out in labs and just poured liquid from one test tube to the other hoping it didn't explode. So I got a scholarship to __________ University and went to study science, I majored in Biology at first because it was always my best subject. But as I learned Biology, I got really interested in the Medical aspect of how the body worked and over 2 years wanted to become a Doctor. But honestly, I relized how hard it was to study and balance school while working my McJobs that I absolutely hated. What was your first job you ever had?
SET: Blah Blah Blah
Holden: *NEG if the targets value hasn't been lowered enough yet* Well I've held every crappy teenager job you can think off. I've flipped hamburgers, pumped gas, worked at a hardware store, been a security guard, and stuffed files for office workers. But you know... as bad as all that was I can confidently say that they've made me a better person and I truly know I've earned everything I have in my life now. I learned so many lessons from them and met so many cool people that as much as I hated it at the time I can look back and appreciate how it made me ME! But I think I'm getting off topic. So 3 years ago I come across this advertisement for _______(My current interesting job(Very DHV), law enforcement related) and I got higherd even thought I thought I totally blew the interview with my boss. So right now, I'm still doing _________ and I'm in charge of 53 people! Can you believe that! So I continued going to school being able to live out my childhood dream sortof. But I got away from wanting to be a Doctor and I started studying Nueroscience and eventually I Majored in Psychology.
*Potential Segway into any cold-reading because most women don't know that academic psych is nothing like pop-psych*
Holden: But recently I'm lined up to start my new job of _________ . I was always humming and hawing about doing that, but you know what sealed the deal. It was when my friend _________ got killed doing _________. And I really respected the guy, so I guess I'm kinda doing it for him, so even though I got a degree in Psychology and could have a sweet career doing __________, I want to do this because right now it's what my heart is telling me. Did you ever get a feeling that told you no matter what everyone else says, you trust that feeling soooo much that everyone else just kinda fades away?
*Transition to EV'ing about emotions/feelings and go back to the cold-routines*
Yes I know this is very long for a simple question but I need some feedback on:
1. Is it too long?
2. Is it too much about me too early into the set?
3. Does it display a lot of DHV? Or are there area's I could improve to encrease it?
4. Any actions and kino routines I could splice in here?
5. By asking questions to the set am I validating them too early?
Overall, I think its interesting stuff where I focus the attention on me and I give back to the set enough to keep them interested. Also there is a lot of threads here for conversation so when I'm done the conversation isn't.
Last edited by Holden on Fri Sep 21, 2007 4:25 pm, edited 1 time in total.