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| Author: | figureitout [ Fri Feb 26, 2010 1:38 am ] |
| Post subject: | Give me your thoughts on dhv story! thanks! |
Have you ever been in a fist fight So what were you like at 8,.. I can see you being a little bit of a bully on the playground, or were you a really a shy sweet little girl I had my first fight in first grade. I remember this 5th grader for no reason other then the fact that he was a bully pushed one of my friends. And i always stick up for my friens, So I tackled him and started punching him. But this kid was so much bigger than me that it didn't hurt him, so he was laughing the whole time. Then a teacher broke it up and i was sent to the principles office. They gave me this GIANT pinkslip which meant i was a bad boy. That was my first fist fight, there was this one crazy fight that changed my life, but i'll tell you about it when i know you better...(bait) |
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| Author: | MrMonterey831 [ Fri Feb 26, 2010 6:16 am ] |
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hey men not bad . i like that u make it seem like u care for your friends and how u did the end -"" there was this one crazy fight that changed my life, but i'll tell you about it when i know you better...(bait)"" nice i am thinking of using this myself when i run off of story's. nice 
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| Author: | figureitout [ Fri Feb 26, 2010 7:29 am ] |
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thanks for the feedback bro! |
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| Author: | The_Enforcer [ Fri Feb 26, 2010 9:57 am ] |
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Generally speaking, I wouldn't transition into the story about the second fight. Speaking about fighting usually conveys low-value and seems like bragging, but the fact that you are talking about a childhood experience will probably keep you in the clear. But if you really want feedback, wonder out into the field and see how you go. |
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| Author: | figureitout [ Fri Feb 26, 2010 5:07 pm ] |
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yea i agree that it can be a dlv. The second story is from 6 years ago, snd it's a story of personal growth and how i use to have a chip on my shoulder and have learned so much from my mistakes. I did use the story the other day and got some good feedback. It seems people love to hear about fights. I'm gonna add a line in there like "but know i feel there are so many better ways to handle things then fight, to many guys have this tough guy complex and it's pathetic."-what do you think? |
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| Author: | figureitout [ Fri Feb 26, 2010 11:24 pm ] |
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Here is my story revised. Any comments appreciated -Have you ever been in a fist fight -I see you being the playground bully I had my first fight in first grade. I remember this 5th grader for no reason other then the fact that he was a bully pushed one of my friends. And i always stick up for my friends, So I tackled him and started punching him. But this kid was so much bigger than me that it didn't hurt him, so he was just laughing the whole time. Then a teacher broke it up and i was sent to the principles office. They gave me this GIANT pinkslip which meant i was a bad boy.I got in SOO much trouble with my parents. That was my first fist fight, there was this one crazy fight that changed my life thou,..i've had an intresting life as i'm sure you've had.. but know i feel there are so many better ways to handle things then fight, to many guys have this tough guy complex and it's pathetic. I'm not sure if i can tell you about my second fight..we'll see when i get to know you better...(bait) -(tease) I know you think your big and bad and that i'm just a lover..but I use to be a fighter(act like you're gonna fight her while smiling) -so what's the craziest thing you've ever done |
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