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Author:  jimbobday [ Fri Jan 22, 2010 10:19 am ]
Post subject:  Dating site profile help
Hey guys. Just wanting a few suggestions on improvements on my profile. I basically only send out emails to HB8's+ and get a lot that look at my profile afterwards but usually only about 20% mail back so decided it must be something to do with my profile.

So here it is.

My Profile

You were clicking through the profiles and you found me, congratulations! My name is James.

Im a busy young professional that doesnt always have time to meet people the conventional ways. I am an educated, funny, outgoing, open-minded, laid back individual. I am the type of guy my friends and family come to for advice. I value true friends and my relationship with my family above all else. I dont have time for drama or emotional hysterics, as I am sure you dont
either

When Im not at my day job loving what I do youd find me kick boxing, Hanging out with mates, golfing, fishing, dancing, reading, scuba diving, traveling or watching a good movie on a rainy day. Also love to sing and am starting to learn the guitar in the new year. I dont ask that you be into everything, but ask that you are out going a don't mind trying new things

The important characteristics I'm looking for:

So here is what I am looking for in you. You should have a good sense of humor, have more going on for you than your good looks, and enjoy life! If this is starting to sound like you then we should have a lot of fun together. Its time for you to click on 'Send a message to this member' below


Any help or suggestions would be greatly appreciated. Thanks
Author:  GvCIA [ Fri Jan 22, 2010 2:26 pm ]
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"Im a busy young professional that doesnt always have time..."
Idk if I'd even say anything close to that. Girls might think you're too busy for them in general (which is retarded but hey, that's my experience).

Other than that, I really can't see anything wrong with your profile per-say, how do you phrase the messages?[/quote]
Author:  skypirate1965 [ Fri Jan 22, 2010 3:27 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Dating site profile help
Quote:
Hey guys. Just wanting a few suggestions on improvements on my profile. I basically only send out emails to HB8's+ and get a lot that look at my profile afterwards but usually only about 20% mail back so decided it must be something to do with my profile.

So here it is.

My Profile

You were clicking through the profiles and you found me, congratulations! My name is James.

Im a busy young professional that doesnt always have time to meet people the conventional ways. I am an educated, funny, outgoing, open-minded, laid back individual. I am the type of guy my friends and family come to for advice. I value true friends and my relationship with my family above all else. I dont have time for drama or emotional hysterics, as I am sure you dont
either

When Im not at my day job loving what I do youd find me kick boxing, Hanging out with mates, golfing, fishing, dancing, reading, scuba diving, traveling or watching a good movie on a rainy day. Also love to sing and am starting to learn the guitar in the new year. I dont ask that you be into everything, but ask that you are out going a don't mind trying new things

The important characteristics I'm looking for:

So here is what I am looking for in you. You should have a good sense of humor, have more going on for you than your good looks, and enjoy life! If this is starting to sound like you then we should have a lot of fun together. Its time for you to click on 'Send a message to this member' below


Any help or suggestions would be greatly appreciated. Thanks
I think the content is good but it's more like a list and falls into "show don't tell" thing. Write a little bit about each (well some) of your interests in a story-like fashion to do the DHV stuff, use a bit of suggestive, rich imagery through the words.

20% response rate doesn't seem *that* bad. You do have to accept that some girls will just simply not have any interest after checking the profile.

Do you chase up or contact the non-repliers? Worth doing imho as some girls start online stuff , get overwhelmed, sidetracked or demoralised (or all 3!) and simply your mail gets forgotten.

What's your overall conversion orate of the girls that DO reply?

I honestly believe the mails have far more importance than the profile, so concentrate on that area.
Author:  jurupa [ Sat Jan 23, 2010 1:49 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Dating site profile help
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Hey guys. Just wanting a few suggestions on improvements on my profile. I basically only send out emails to HB8's+ and get a lot that look at my profile afterwards but usually only about 20% mail back so decided it must be something to do with my profile.
Your semi right. It also has to do with your message that you send them. It gets their attention alright which is good but it does not get them interested enough to reply back.
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My Profile
Since I have not this for a while I thought I would rip apart your profile.:twisted:
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You were clicking through the profiles and you found me, congratulations! My name is James.
Not a bad opening line. Tho its kinda story book like. But it shows some personality which is good. I wouldn't change it if this suits who you are as a person.
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Im a busy young professional that doesnt always have time to meet people the conventional ways. I am an educated, funny, outgoing, open-minded, laid back individual. I am the type of guy my friends and family come to for advice. I value true friends and my relationship with my family above all else. I dont have time for drama or emotional hysterics, as I am sure you dont
either

When Im not at my day job loving what I do youd find me kick boxing, Hanging out with mates, golfing, fishing, dancing, reading, scuba diving, traveling or watching a good movie on a rainy day. Also love to sing and am starting to learn the guitar in the new year. I dont ask that you be into everything, but ask that you are out going a don't mind trying new things
So you are a nice busy professional guy that has a life outside of work. That is what you said in those two paragraphs. There was no personality shown at all. You open with some and then it went bye bye. Put more of your personality in it. Tell a short story instead of listing things you do/into. In other words show the girl who your are instead of telling her. I know that may seem feminine, but you need to advertise your self.
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The important characteristics I'm looking for:
Its not bad to tell girls that you are looking for or want. But it certainly has it pros and cons.
Author:  J-Dub [ Sun Jan 24, 2010 4:37 am ]
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hmm...there are some good suggestions here but I would add the following:

1. Don't put too much detail in your profile. You want to be mysterious in a way. For example, 'I like sports'...but you do not need to list all the sports you are interested in. By putting in too much detail, the girl knows enough about you to make a decision. Also, they see profiles like this ALL THE TIME...so be DIFFERENT

2. You say your funny but there is nothing in your profile that would indicate this. The cocky/confident approach would even work here.

3. Stay away from saying anything negative (like the 'drama' and 'busy' bit). Girls want to make sure you have time for them, if not, they will not be attracted to you.

4. When a girl checks out your profile but doesn't email you, call them out on it. When I do this, I would say 4/5 times the girl emails me back. It works like a charm. And believe it or not, some girls just look at your profile with the hopes that YOU will write them back because they are either too shy or want you to make the move first. Think of it like an IOI when a girl looks at your profile..you pick up the IOI and then you Approach..the concept there is no different than with online gaming.

I would give you more details on how to spice up your profile but there are plenty of examples here and on the net.

Hope this helps.

Best,

J-Dub
Author:  skypirate1965 [ Sun Jan 24, 2010 4:55 pm ]
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2. You say your funny but there is nothing in your profile that would indicate this. The cocky/confident approach would even work here.

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4. When a girl checks out your profile but doesn't email you, call them out on it. When I do this, I would say 4/5 times the girl emails me back. It works like a charm. And believe it or not, some girls just look at your profile with the hopes that YOU will write them back because they are either too shy or want you to make the move first. Think of it like an IOI when a girl looks at your profile..you pick up the IOI and then you Approach..the concept there is no different than with online gaming.

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Regarding saying you're funny - I think it's okay to mention a trait in a profile however demonstrate it in your mail/s. My profile usually says I'm funny and intelligent with NO dhv stuff, but when I send a standard opener it has a section where I rip the piss out of lame emails showing both - plus it shows a bit of bad/nasty streak to prevent me being too nice. I may try adding the standard piss take to the profile and see if that works better.

Regarding girls checking your profile. Initial unsolicited contact from girls IS rare. I ALWAYS assume they're interested but not acting on it - I would never NEG them on not initiating things though.

One of THE most annoying aspects of online game is doing a couple of mails to a girl and you see she's checked your profile (again) just after your last mail and she never replies. Pre- meet nerves - FMR? (haha I just invented First Minute Resistance)
Author:  LaVitaèBreve [ Mon Jan 25, 2010 2:32 am ]
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LOL, "FMR".Good one, Sounds more like Approach Anxiety to me. On the internet though
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